This may be the first story *ever* that I failed to finish because I just got bored with it. I think the problem is lack of humor. I am not particularly known as a writer of comedy, but most of my stories of any length have a good supply of banter, if only because I am compelled to write about world-historical pains in the ass like Ethan and Lex. Bobby and Marie are a nice young couple, but cynical wits...not so much. So the tone is not varied as one could wish for. Hence, a certain degree of tedium.
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